From Darkness to Bright Angel

I began Speak Again Bright Angel in 1992. It started as a short story titled “Keeping the Darkness Out with the Stars”. Although some of the same characters and ideas persist to this day, a lot has been changed.

After I wrote the story, I decided to make it a novel. I remember finishing the first draft, and reading through it. While I was proud of the accomplishment, I knew the story wasn’t right.

I worked on it on and off for the rest of the decade. Each version was an improvement, but I would end with the same combination of pride in the effort but frustration with the book.

It was when I went to Trinity College in Hartford, CT that the real story finally took shape. Professor Fred Phiel was my advisor, and he spent many hours with me working on the book.

There are two memories from this time that have stayed with me. The first was how many characters were shed from the book before he saw the new draft. Having someone with credentials reading it cast my story in a new light. I would think about the characters from his perspective, and I just knew certain ones could not live into the new version.

The second memory came after an editing session. We were walking to our cars when he turned and said, “Hey, what’s it called?” I replied, “Keeping the Darkness Out with the Stars.” He shouted “Too long!”

So there I was, already eliminating characters, and now I didn’t even have a title. Then fate stepped in. I was in my high school classroom. There was a traveling teacher reading from Romeo and Juliet. As I was doing work at my desk, the class was reading from the famous balcony scene. That’s when I heard the line from Romeo that he speaks before Juliet knew he was there. “Speak Again Bright Angel” he says, hoping to hear her voice again. I immediately knew that was the title.

Though the results were much the same with these drafts, the story as it stands now began to take shape. It took more decades to get it ready, but now it’s real, and it’s nearly time for you to have a chance to read it.

All Water’s Moments

Well hello. I’ve been aiming my way back here for a long time. I’m sitting in my Writing Club with middle schoolers who are happily typing away on their own work. I was looking for something to work on when I stumbled upon this poem.

Do you ever have the experience of finding something you wrote long ago, and you say “Hey, wait, this is pretty good”? Well that’s what happened here. I hope you think so, too.

And I hope I’m back. Momentous things may be happening for my writing soon, and I’d love to share them with your!

All Water’s Moments

The stream is creating its course as it flows,  
not carving it
into the rocks and soil;
it is wearing them down,
so slowly and quickly
that it is happening in two
different
seconds.

This stream’s wet pattern is the laying of itself into the silt and stone,
ever creating and sustaining its path.
Thus it changes
always
now.

Thus it is creating the pattern of its own tone,
A tone made up of all its water and of all its moments:
Its great single sound
is a mingling of large and small waterfalls,
spigots,
ripples, V-shaped like bird migrations,
spouts and shallows;
water caught in rock-trap cataracts rasping and splashing,
water deep bass in shadowed crevices,
pouring so thick it is both clear and obscuring,
full flowing into the pool it is ever carving.

Only the dirt and rock can feel this streams underside, touch its other surface.
Unless I will lay in it,
dig myself down so the top of my skin
is even with the skin of the planet,
let the stream cover me
wet me,
yes, drown me,

But before that I will feel the sliding of its bottom water
On top of me.

But I will not,
because it is too cold,
and I would die.

In the ever-moments I have with this stream,
It lets me see a little of the slowness
that is hidden in its rushing,

All of its flickering frozen moments,
numberless as stars and pages.

It slows down only enough to define its slipping away.

And I see it dousing a stone, browning its tan rock skin,
And I see it part around a boulder, and the sound it makes
must be that of water tearing.

I see where the waterfall has caused a spout at its base,
so some of the water that funnels down
curves back up
and reaches its top and comes
down

so that splashes
jump

off

and I have to think it is playing, the water is playing, because if I follow a splash
down
I see it form,
bend out,
come apart and arc a diver’s curve,
and then there are so many others,
brief splashes,
about to fall back into the flow,
and I laugh,
which is why I think it’s playing,
because it’s not right to just stand by a stream
and laugh at water,
is it?

And it asks me,
in its stream language of gurgle and burble and moan,
and patter and drip,
Of low boom,
it asks, “can you see now
flowing by?”

and the sound drops back down, and there is the water, thin and fast, and there is Thoreau, of course, he’s always hanging around by the stream, and he says, “now now now now now now now now now now now now now,” until I just about hit him, and I’m about to shout, “I get it!” but he has that look on his face, the one he gets, and you realize that in that man’s mind he is only trying to teach you, and he is taking this seriously, but he also sees the humor in it, and the inherent absurdity, but also the incredible meaningfulness of it all, also that I am beneath his contempt, that we are just humble specks hurtling through space, that we are all one, and we are all separate, and how can you hit all that? I wouldn’t know where to aim.