This week’s challenge for #Tankatuesday is to create a dodoitsu. The syllabic scheme is 7-7-7-5, and we have to use these “kigo phrases”:
- #1: “early winter dusk”
- #2: “chilly north winds blow”
- #3: “warmth around the hearth”
Boots crunching the frosted grass As I turn my face away So only one side is cold Chilly north winds blow I wipe the crumbling leaves Off of the neatly stacked wood Barely visible in the Early winter dusk Left arm lifts wood to my right Cradling against my chest Holding the future fire Warmth around the hearth
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I can picture you here in your words. Very nice!
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Thanks!!
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I’m with you… I’m all about the fireplace! Well done, Mark.
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Great imagery takes us there 🙌
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Thank you!
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Oh, yes, getting ready the fireplace. Lovely poem!
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Thanks!
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You’ve captured the chill and change in season. And your last stanza – perfection. 😊
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That’s a very nice response thank you!!
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Nice series, Boz. I like the
“stacked wood
Barely visible in the
Early winter dusk”
Resonates for me as up until a couple of years ago that’s how I heated my house.
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A future fire…
I think someone said that cutting wood warms us twice?
I might even light a fire this weekend. …
Get the chill out of the lower level (where our hearth is).
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I love that saying! And we just decided to have a fire in the hearth this weekend as well
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🔥 Stay cozy!
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